Wednesday, May 1, 2013

lamentation

Listlessly rocking, keening
Against the rocks
Memories flooding
Engulfing her while she watches
Nymphs swarming, slithering
Through the waves
As waters rush aboard
The ship, his ship
Insensible, the scene before her
Offensive waters pulling him down
Never to be seen again

by K, Copyright 2013

*I would not speak my truth if I was not to express that there have been many times throughout the past several years that I have struggled to hear my own voice and have failed to understand who I am, amidst the chaotic sorrow that floods through our house due to one of my daughters being diagnosed with a chronic disease. This poem was written for Poets United prompt an authentic life.

17 comments:

  1. Yes, our sorrows too are all too authentic. But if we did not feel them and acknowledge their truth, we'd be inhuman. I am sorry for the circumstances which prompted this, but you have expressed it in beautiful metaphor.

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  2. Yes, you have written your authentic sorrow beautifully. May you all be close and rich in love, even though the journey is difficult. She has you, so she will make it through.

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  3. Your poem spoke authentically to my heart. Our realities are all too often fraught with challenges and it is all we can do to keep from being engulfed. I hope your pain is eased by writing about it and your voice becomes clear and strong so you can find comfort in it!
    Rumi's Beloved

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  4. Your authentic voice is very strong in this poem!

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  5. Thank you all for your lovely comments

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  6. Oh, Goodness; distress is palpable in this heartfelt and compelling poem. And you postscript is as touching as the poem. So well done, K. Thank you for sharing at Verse First.

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  7. I can feel your words and the strength of your character, i will offer up a prayer for you and your family. I loved the poem.

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  8. sorrow is the true calling of the heart for that is where the soul finds its purpose of living. Pray for you and your family to tide over this crisis.

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  9. This is so powerful, heartfelt.

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  10. Sounds like the lament of the dragonfly to her lover! A good metaphor for drowning in your sorrows. Nice acrostic poem.

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  11. Hi, K. I like this lament. I like to think of the dragonfly nymph who must lament for her past watery form. A nice acrostic poem, thanks.

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  12. K, I am sorry for what you and your family are dealing with. Your words express heartfelt. I hope your writing helps you to find strength each day.

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  13. Thank you all for your kind words!

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  14. K, your acrostic was a welcome response to the prompt. Chronic mental illness permeates my family, a disease and more...

    Your approach to this challenge was intriguing, filled with metaphor, haunting. So glad I saw you at Poets United, because you are a force to be reckoned with! Peace and may your whole house be pain-free someday, Amy

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  15. Thank you so much Amy for your lovely comment. I hope you and yours are doing well also.

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